Teh Wozzinator

First, I wanted to say that I noticed you used "waned" a lot. This isn't a bad thing, just something I noticed. An edit: "“Are you telling me all you ...

bkwrm - This is a pretty good poem. You have beautiful imagery, and the theme is vaguely original; but I get the feeling that I've read lots of poems about ...

I really liked this part. I think that it's one of the best chapters yet. No edits! I don't have much time--basically none at all--and I'm planning on posting a ...

:D Well done. Very poetic, kind of traditional in an old way, which (in contradictory terms) makes in fresh! Like many great songs and poems, it's simple- which is what ...

Wow, this was really good. I would like to hear it on the radio. :D Edits: Don't use hole twice in the first *stanza??* Is that the word you use ...

I guess that I don't really understand, but I really liked the poem... without understanding exactly what it means. Your rhythm and rhyming are good. I imagined a dragon when ...

Haiku's are easy But sometimes they don't make sense Refrigerator =D That's on a t-shirt... You should probably say that it was if that's where you found it, or else ...

One edit that I have was in this: "It’s not—like once upon a time It’s gone for ever, ever more The magical woods of time Have all but dissipated Like ...

This was good, very funny, and Clover was a good character. But the dog thing confused me. At first it seemed like you were talking about... a girl was my ...

"Feedback questions 1) Did you find Yazra's mother's metaphor on the birds and the bees to be a bit long? No, I liked it... but you could probably shorten it ...

This is short, so no edits here! Really good... better than I've done yet. I didn't even know you wrote poetry... but as usual, you're awesome. All three of the ...

I'm baaaaaaack!!!!! (lol!) Wow. This was really sweet. Like all of your work. No, really, I like the idea. I also like your wording. The only two edits I have ...

At first I thought that this was kind of boring... But then I started laughing... And I loved the Bessie part. That cracked me up. And Business man. I don't ...

This is really cool. I can't wait to read more. I think that this has a lot of thought put into it--it's very, very well written. The only edit I ...

Edit: " “Of course,” the Minister said, his grip tensioning." I would just use "tensing" over "tensioning" because it sounds more natural and much better to the reader. Also: "...Are ...